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National Day is on October 1st.It is China's birthday.It's an imortant day also.
On National Day, I went to Zhuhai. Zhuhai is a beautiful city. The sea and the sky are blue. The seafood are delicious too.
I went to the sea. And I walked on the beach. The sea wind blew very comfortably. I saw many beautiful conches.I picked up them. I used them to make a necklace...
What a fantastic day!

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The National Day is on October 1st.It is China's birthday.It's also an imortant day .
On the National Day, I went to Zhuhai. Zhuhai is a beautiful city. The sea and the sky are blue. The seafood are delicious ,too.
I went to the seaside. And I walked along the beach. The sea wind blew very comfortably. I saw many beautiful conches.I picked them up. I used them to make a necklace...
What a fantastic day!
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The National Day is on 1st October.It is the birthday of our China and an imortant day as well.
On National Day, I went to Zhuhai which is a beautiful city. The sea and the sky are blue. The seafood are delicious too.
I went to the sea. And I walked on the beach. The sea wind blew very comfortably. I saw many beautiful conches.I picked them up and made a necklace...
What a fantastic day!