请翻译高手进来帮我看看我翻译中的问题，中文是原论文，英文是我翻译的。

Question

贩毒、吸毒问题是当今世界重大的社会问题。我国的青少年毒品犯罪呈逐年上升势，且上升的幅度较大,从长远来看,21世纪初我国毒品犯罪特别是青少年毒品违法犯罪问题将会更加严峻，本文从社会工作的视角分析了青少年犯罪的现状、特点、危害，探讨了青少年吸毒问题的个人、家庭、学校、社会等原因,并运用社会工作的方法介入青少年犯罪问题，以帮助吸毒的青少年实现社会化，脱离毒品的泥潭。

Drug trafficking and drug taking is now becoming one of the most serious problems all over the world. In China, the amount of teen-agers who are involved in narcotic drug crime is in an escalating trend, and with a great variation of amplitude year by year. In the long term, drug-related crimes, especially happened on young boys and girls, will get to a higher degree. Here in this article,

current situation, characteristic, and detriment to the society on drug crime will be analyzed from the view of social work. What’s more, the root causes of teen-agers fall into drug crime will be discussed from the aspects of individual, family, school, and society. The most important thing is that we hope we can make the boys and girls come back to society and have a normal life they should own ultimately by the methods of social work.

Answer 1

one of the most serious problems （少了个social，social problem）
especially happened on young boys and girls（on改among吧）
第二段的逻辑连词好像没有必要，原文没有这层关系
青少年犯罪有个术语 juvenile delinquenc
从“本文”开始你的翻译理解起来就和原文由出入了。以下为我的版本，对比看下（也可能有问题哈）
This article analyzes the status quo,feature and hazard of juvenile delinquency from the view of social work,discusses the cause of it from the aspects of individual,family,school and the society .this article also step in juvenile delinquency with the method of social work so as to get them away from drugs and come back to society

Answer 2

我在金山词霸上查了一查，是这样的：Drug trafficking, drug abuse is a major social problem in today's world. Our evidence shows that young people on drug-related crime rally, and have increased more in the long run, the 21st century, particularly young people, our drug crime drug-related crimes will be more severe, this article from the perspective of the social work the status of juvenile delinquency, characteristics, hazards, discusses the issue of youth drug abuse to individuals, families, schools, social and other reasons, and use the methods of social work intervention of juvenile delinquency, to help young drug addicts, socialized, from drug quagmire.
我很佩服你一人也能翻译出来，不容易啊