题目:
假定你校将举行一个成人仪式,你将作为代表在仪式上发言。请你按以下内容要点准备一篇英文发言稿。
1.过去对成年的向往;
2.现在的感受和认识;
3.将来的目标及措施。
参考词汇:责任 responsibility
注意:1.词数100左右;2.可以适当增加细节,使行文连贯;3.发言稿的开头与结束语已为你写好(不计入总词数)
我的作文:
Good morning, everyone!
The topic of my speech today is "Thoughts on becoming a grown-up".
Since I was an innocent child, I have been longing for adulthood. With my mental development, my desire to turn into an adult grows stronger and stronger. Besides, what I have been dreaming of are the freedom and independence I would have if I were an adult.
At present, as I'll become a grown-up soon, it occurs to me that growing up not only means gaining freedom but also requires taking up more responsibilities. Therefore, in order to meet the requirements, I'm determined to develop a strong sense of responsibility, for which I plan to participate in more social activities and lead a busy but colorful life.
Thank you for listening.
同上次一样,请打分并作指出不足,谢谢!
另外,问下老师,作文的卷面是不是比较重要?我有没有必要先在草稿纸上写,在抄到答题卡上?因为有时我会改动几处,在答题卡上划得有点“脏”。
谢谢。不少地方修改得的确比较好。马上要高考了,不准备再写作文了,现在对英语作文信心满满,祝福自己高考顺利。
追答祝你高考成功 金榜题名
来自:求助得到的回答本回答被提问者采纳我们省是25分满分。
追答这是四川卷的,当年是35分
如果是25分的话,大概可以在20-21吧。
其实,主观因素比较大
if I were an adult,what I have been dreaming of is the freedom and independence I would have 你给我改的这一句完全不通了,原本是对的。
还有,我怎么看答案上范文也就那样呢?似乎还没我写得好。范文:http://edu.qq.com/a/20100608/000695_14.htm
呵呵,如果没有逗号,全是长句子,阅卷老师会很累很厌烦的
高考阅卷,一人一天阅数百份,会又闲心么:)
要适当用点短句子?那么怎么同时追求语言的高级呢?
追答你这篇文章里用的就比较高级了,只是名词性从句较多而已,可以适当用点状语从句,置于句首。
总的原则是要表达清楚明白,不要用多了长句子,连自己都绕晕了,大家不明其意就是了。
别担心,你的作文不错的。
别担心???
我英语作文是想接近满分的,如果只有20-21分,那么就离我的目标远了
其实,你自己基本就做到这样就差不多了
按你的要求,要追求接近满分,现在你需要注意的是书写和卷面