我是广交会展览公司的谢先生，专业从事调剂广交会摊位，办理广交会证件等等展览服务。需要帮忙可以 联系我。以下是一位外贸高手对一封英文版广交会邀请函的点评和修改，讲解很详细，希望对你有所帮助。1。Dear Sir, ----- 除非你知道他肯定是位先生，否则就该用Dear Sir/Madam, 最好是直接用名字，象Dear Frank, Dear John, Dear Mary, 等等，否则有批处理的嫌疑。
2。My old friend, hope all fine on your side. “My old friend"彻底不需要。这样的说法是熟人之间用的， 不是很熟识的人之间太亲热了会让人起戒心。 "hope all fine on your side"的潜台词是“反正我这儿不怎么顺当，你哪儿怎么样？” 邀请函可以直接了当地开始， 不用问候。如果是老客户可以顺致对过去合作的感谢。3。We should like to invite you to attend the Spring Fair Canton 2005 which will be held from 15th Apr to 20th Oct. Our booth No is Hall 10.3C.16 and 10.3C.17.
"shoud like"该是"would like". 15th Apr 该是：15th of April, 或 April 15th. 有礼仪要求的正式信函中应该尽量避免缩略词。 另外你们邀请他来参观你们在广交会的展出，而不是邀请他来参加广交会。所以这段我觉这样比较好："You are cordially invited to visit our exhibition at the 2005 Spring Canton Fair, which will be held from the 15th to the 20th of April. Please be advised that our exhibition booth numbers are 10.3C.16 and 10.3C.17”" 4。We develop many new designs and programs this year, and I am sure there must be some kinds attracting your attention. Meanwhile, we'd like take this opportunity to talk with you for the new business face to face.
"develop"--研发是新产品出现的必然路径，不必提。这里你要强调的是你展示给他什么东西。展会嘛。 所以用“This year, we will be presenting to you our new designs and ...". "program" 在这里是想表达什么呀？ "face to face"用作状语的时候说法比较不够文明。商业交流中应该避免提及身体器官。 "in person"比较好：
At the exhibition, we'll be presenting to you our newest designs. We believe you and your customers will be pleasantly impressed by both the creativity and the workmanship of our new products and new designs. We will be looking forward to talking to you in person and listening to your opinions on our products as well as our potential/continuous (新客户用potential,老客户用"continuous") cooperation。5。You may see various kinds of bedsheet sets and comforters made from printing or dyeing fabrics, such as cotton,dobby,T/C, CVC,damask, as well as jacquards with high-count and high density. Also you can select the most novelty designs from our designs sample shelves. Other hometextiles, etc,curtains, cushions have their space at our booth also.
这段不错，但是你要在列出这么多种类之前先呈明今年的卖点。然后用in引出类目。因为类目人人都是这些。所以要用你的卖点去抓住他的兴趣：
You may find novelties in high thread count high density bedding sets, comforters, and jacquards in quality materials including cotton,dobby,T/C, CVC and damask. In addtion to bedding products, you will also find beautifully designed curtains, cushions, and other fabric products in our boothes. For your convenience, we have prepared sample catalogs of our complete lines of products and designs.
6。Our goal is: Work hard to make our company be a super global production basis of textiles with excellent management, products and service. 这段可有可无。保留的话也该把自己公司放在一个提供产品和服务的位置上。现在还没有的东西在邀请信中不用提。
7。Please visit our website
www.chinachenxiao.com if you have any question.
邀请就邀请了，不用等他有问题才来访问：
Please visit our website at http://
www.chinachenxiao.com for more information.
8。 Hope that you will be able to attend. 这句可以换为：If you do decide to attend the Fair, please send us a email informing us your visiting schedule so we can make the proper arrangement for our meeting. 这是发出回信邀请。他真来的话你就可以把他当老朋友对待好去安排宴请啊，会面啊，参观啊那些事了，对吧？ 即使他不能来的话，你也该邀请他回信同时把这作为一个向他推销你们产品的绝好机会：
If your busy schedule makes it inconvenient for you to come to the Fair, please also send a email to let us know so that we can make sure to send you our newest catalogs for your business reference.
9。 Yours faithfully 这句过了。用Truely yours就可以了。关系是对等的， 不存在忠诚不忠诚的问题。真诚就好。
10。 Best regards